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I Wrote a Story

Posted by MSPToons - September 15th, 2013

As the title states, I wrote a story: "The Chasm". I've done this in the past, the first being an essay back in high school. They other two I've written can be found below:
Let Us Go into the House of the Lord
Here I Am

These can be hefty, especially "The Chasm" at a whopping 19 pages single-spaced, but they should be worth your time if you have any.

I Wrote a Story

Comments (3)

what kind of genre are your stories? could you add a small description about what happens in these stories? that makes your stories interesting so people want to read them.

I don't write for genre's sake or generally classify my creations by genre, but I guess if I had to, I would probably say action or drama.

interesting short story
I assume you have read Dante
I would say The Chasm can be classified as horror
Great imagery, nice use of a blank main character to project on, perhaps work on word choice for future work
You are quite good at this.

adding to my last post:
the bit with the children on the field was too preachy, but more importantly, its symbolism was told.
What you did well was showing the analogy and the bit at the end should have been shown to the reader, however it is still a nice modern Inferno.

I would have loved to put more detail into the ending, but there are some things that simply cannot be described or understood by the human mind. More specifically, words don't exist that could describe that glorious moment. 1 Corinthians 2:9 (KJV) states: "But as it is written, Eye hath not seen, nor ear heard, neither have entered into the heart of man, the things which God hath prepared for them that love him." 2 Corinthians 12:4 (NLT) also mentions "things so astounding that they cannot be expressed in words, things no human is allowed to tell," in regards to the splendor and glory of Heaven.